I want to write this as a book but I’m not sure. I need your opinion.
A mother gave birth to an ordinary kid. When she was about 3 she got very sick. Her mom didn’t know if she would survive. The mother fed her a special substance that acted like a medicine. Little did they know that the medicine let the girl live forever. The father was really harsh so the girl didn’t do much with him. Over the years the mother and girl did all sorts of things together like singing, art, fighting lessons, etc. On the girls 13 birthday the father noticed that the girl looked so young for her age. The father was friends with the mayor of the town, so the father told him everything. The mayor grew suspicious as well. A while later, the girl was leaving to school. Right before she left she got into a terrible fight with her father. Let’s just say she won. When she was at the school doors, she was greeted by a group of cops that wanted to take her away. She knew this was the mayors doing. ( they despised each other)So she ran. Ran far of into the woods. Where nobody could find her. She put her splinters feet into a pond then instantly got flashbacks Of when she was a little girl. It hurt her head. After she walked to a tree she felt was special. There beneath her feet was a big hole in the ground by the tree. She with in and there was a big concrete room infested with roots dirt and cobwebs. For the next decade she spent alone fixing up the room under the tree, she carved weapons out of wood and stone,she liked to mess around with those who look down on her, hurt those who tryed to end her, and all that stuff. She looked about 15ish after a decade. One day a small group of kids that ran away (looked her age) came deep into the woods right by her secret base. She gave them the special substance and they now live with her forever. After 2 yrs, the mayor told everyone about them. He described them as savage, monsters, and dangerous. they decided they wanted to end the mayors life and his family’s.
This is all I have. Please give feed back. Maybe what I should name the characters or where the setting should be.
by Schoolweirdo547